Dangling Participles
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intheheartTitle: Dangling Participles
Rating: PG-13.
Summary: Good grammar is the difference between writing a Western and writing porn.
Date: 2019
Notes: Yes, I have edited sentences like this.
The apartment was quiet, for once; no sound but the faint rumble of traffic, the soft whisper of pages turning, and Gina tsking quietly as she red-penned her way through the current manuscript. So when she stopped tsking and said, "Oh my God," it sounded a lot louder than it actually was.
"What?" Ivy sat up, her book dropping to her lap.
"This author," Gina began, then stopped, and shook her head, her cheeks bright red. "I can't. Just read it."
Ivy craned her neck over Gina's shoulder and read the underlined sentence aloud. "Coming fast and hard, she watched the train roar... oh my God."
"The dangers of dangling participles," Gina said, and sighed.
Rating: PG-13.
Summary: Good grammar is the difference between writing a Western and writing porn.
Date: 2019
Notes: Yes, I have edited sentences like this.
The apartment was quiet, for once; no sound but the faint rumble of traffic, the soft whisper of pages turning, and Gina tsking quietly as she red-penned her way through the current manuscript. So when she stopped tsking and said, "Oh my God," it sounded a lot louder than it actually was.
"What?" Ivy sat up, her book dropping to her lap.
"This author," Gina began, then stopped, and shook her head, her cheeks bright red. "I can't. Just read it."
Ivy craned her neck over Gina's shoulder and read the underlined sentence aloud. "Coming fast and hard, she watched the train roar... oh my God."
"The dangers of dangling participles," Gina said, and sighed.
